In your opinion, how long should kids play video games on weekends?
학생이 쓴 원문
Video games should be moderately played.
Because if your eyes get bad and you get addicted, it becomes dangerous.
It is good for your health to spend time with your family on weekends.
강사 첨삭
Hello Stella!
Thank you for doing your homework. :)
I understand that English could be really difficult.
But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.
You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^
Xoxo,
T. Christina ^^
Here are my corrections for you:
Video games should be moderately played.
>> CORRECT!
Because if your eyes get bad and you get addicted, it becomes dangerous.
>> Because if your eyes get damaged and you get addicted, it becomes dangerous.
It is good for your health to spend time with your family on weekends.
>> CORRECT!
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