In your opinion, what are the worst disabilities?

2016-02-03 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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This is a scary question that I don’t want to think of. I believe that most people rarely imagine the situation where they become disabilities because of accidents or are born as such. The amputation of my fingers, arms or legs would be devastating. What if we lose our vision or hearing? What if we have to live in darkness forever? Physical disabilities are detrimental to live in this society. There are too many challenges or obstacles to live as a disabled. Breathing itself without getting help from others could be a burden to those disabilities. Imagine you are not able to physically do anything like dressing yourself, eating, or walking. However, what if you have mental disabilities such as being a retarded. Is it better to be mentally retarded because you couldn’t know or realize that you are disabled, so it would be normal for you, whereas the others are all physical disabilities that you’d realize? The worst case is quadriplegic or become a vegetable.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir [이름]!

Happy hump day.

Yes, you are right.

It is difficult to live in this word with disabilities.

I can\'t imagine myself being blind or deaf.

We should be proud of those disabled people who are fighting to live.

Thanks for your essay.
Teacher Nina


This is a scary question that I don’t want to think of.

>> correct

I believe that most people rarely imagine the situation where they become disabilities because of accidents or are born as such.

>> I believe that most people rarely imagine the situation where they become disabled  person because of accidents or are born as such.

>> OR: I believe that most people rarely imagine the situation where they have disabilities because of accidents or are born as such.

The amputation of my fingers, arms or legs would be devastating.

>> correct

What if we lose our vision or hearing?

>> correct

What if we have to live in darkness forever?

>> correct

Physical disabilities are detrimental to live in this society.

>> correct

There are too many challenges or obstacles to live as a disabled.

>> correct

Breathing itself without getting help from others could be a burden to those disabilities.

>> correct

Imagine you are not able to physically do anything like dressing yourself, eating, or walking.

>> correct

However, what if you have mental disabilities such as being a retarded.

>> correct

Is it better to be mentally retarded because you couldn’t know or realize that you are disabled, so it would be normal for you, whereas the others are all physical disabilities that you’d realize?

>> correct

The worst case is quadriplegic or become a vegetable.

>> correct

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