In your opinion what causes over population? Do you think it will be come a big problem in the near

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There are many people in the world.

>> Correct.

At this moment I\'m writing this essay, babies might be born in somewhere.

>> At this moment while I\'m writing this essay, babies might be born somewhere.  

We can figure out the reasons that cause over population.

>> Correct.

One is the increase in birth rate in developing countries, the other is extended life expectancy.

>> One is the increase in birth rate in developing countries, while the other is extended life expectancy. 

I think that over population will be problem in the world.

>> I think that over population will be a problem in the world. 
Of course, there might some people say that population will be balanced because birth rate is increasing in some countries while decreasing in other countries.

>> Of course, some people might say that population will be balanced because the birth rate is increasing in some countries while decreasing in other countries.

But the problem is the quality.

>> But the problem is quality.

Many babies are born in most developing counties, but there are not enough educational facility.

>> Many babies are born in most developing counties, but there are not enough educational facilities.

This makes the growth of the country difficult.

>> This makes the growth of a country difficult.

And in case of developed countries, birth rate has declined and the number of the old is getting larger.

>> And in case of developed countries, birth rate has declined and the number elderly is getting higher.

This means that productivity of a country will be decreased.

>> This means that the productivity of a country will be decreased.
I\'m sure t hat over population eventually will affect negatively over the world as I mentioned above.

>> I\'m sure that over population will have a negative effect all over the world.

Thus, all government should take an effort to solve this problem.

>> Thus, the government should take an effort to solve this problem.