In your opinion, when people are wealthy or successful, do they have a special responsibility to giv
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I want to say ‘absolutely yes!’ about this question because if it is not, the world is confusing.
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>>I would absolutely say yes regarding the question.
First, it is not duty to help someone when people are wealthy or successful.
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>>Initially, it\'s not someone\'s responsibility to help people who are in need.
However, if rich person didn’t give the chance people who need help through money, the gap between the rich and the poor is getting bigger.
>>However, if rich person didn’t give a chance to help people through money, the gap between the rich and the poor is getting bigger.
Second, they have big power which can affect to people.
>>Second, they have big power which can affect people.
They have a lot of money and are well known to the public.
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It means to make a big influence into the society.
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If they do something, the public will learn and follow their activities.
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>>The crowd follows what they do.
The more they are popular, the bigger their influence is.
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In the world, many people felt a responsibility to give back and help others.
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>>Some people think that it\'s their responsibility to help.
They showed their responsibility as a behavior.
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For example, many entertainers like Suzy have donated for a long time in Korea.
>>For example, many entertainers like Suzy had donated for a long time in Korea.
Their action is known recently.
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>>Recently, their deeds were known.
Also, soccer players like Son hold charity soccer game every year.
>>Also, soccer players like Son holds a charity soccer game every year.
Through this game, they can donate and provide fan service.
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