In your opinion, which is the biggest factor that transforms a business: marketing, product quality,
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that marketing is the biggest factor. Although the quality of the product is pretty good, if the company doesn\'t promote it, nobody knows the product. And the company can\'t sale the product because it doesn\'t have an awareness. On the other hands, if the quality of product is little bad but it is very famous, people might buy it. For example, there are a lot of famous cafes in Instagram. But, I can\'t understand why some of them are famous when I go there. And I think it is the power of marketing. People usually focus more at product\'s awareness.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Mary! You gave a strong and practical argument about the importance of marketing. Your real-life example about cafés on Instagram makes your point very convincing and relatable. To improve, focus on small grammar issues such as sell vs sale, on the other hand, and prepositions like focus on. Overall, your reasoning is clear and your examples are effective , great job!
-Teacher Wela
Although the quality of the product is pretty good, if the company doesn\'t promote it, nobody knows the product.
>> Even if the quality of a product is very good, if the company does not promote it, nobody will know about it.
And the company can\'t sale the product because it doesn\'t have an awareness.
>> As a result, the company cannot sell the product because it lacks public awareness.
On the other hands, if the quality of product is little bad but it is very famous, people might buy it.
>> On the other hand, if the quality of a product is a little lower but it is very famous, people might still buy it.
For example, there are a lot of famous cafes in Instagram.
>> For example, there are many famous cafés on Instagram.
But, I can\'t understand why some of them are famous when I go there.
>> However, when I visit some of them, I cannot understand why they are so famous.
And I think it is the power of marketing.
>> I think this is the power of marketing.
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