In your opinion, why is it important to constantly research on and find ways to improve our diagnost
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Many people died whose didn\'t know their disease due to the poor diagnostic technology. It can be possible to treat serious diseases in accordance with the improvement of diagnostic ways. If doctors don\'t know what are main factors to the patient\'s illness, they can\'t say any positive treatment comments because it is the first step of treatment. Average life expentancy is gradually increasing because of development of medical technology. People used to die with flu that is considered as a light disease a couple of years ago but nobody care about flu because we can easily be diagnosed from doctors and be treated with simple medications. The survival rate of cancer patients has dramatically increased since imaging devices are developed because it is easy to remove tumors by resection as early as doctors find out patient\'s disease. I believe that why life expendancy has increased is development of medical skills and technologies.
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~ T. CamilleMany people died whose didn\'t know their disease due to the poor diagnostic technology.
>> Many people died because they didn\'t know their disease due to the poor diagnostic technology.
It can be possible to treat serious diseases in accordance with the improvement of diagnostic ways.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It can be possible to treat serious diseases in accordance with the improvement of diagnostic tools.
If doctors don\'t know what are main factors to the patient\'s illness, they can\'t say any positive treatment comments because it is the first step of treatment.
>> If doctors don\'t know what are the main factors to the patient\'s illness, they can\'t say any positive treatment comments because it is the first step of treatment.
Average life expentancy is gradually increasing because of development of medical technology.
Average life expentancy is gradually increasing because of development of medical technology.
>> CORRECT!
People used to die with flu that is considered as a light disease a couple of years ago but nobody care about flu because we can easily be diagnosed from doctors and be treated with simple medications.
>> People used to die with flu that is considered as a light disease a couple of years ago, but nobody cares about flu, because we can easily be diagnosed by doctors and be treated with simple medications.
The survival rate of cancer patients has dramatically increased since imaging devices are developed because it is easy to remove tumors by resection as early as doctors find out patient\'s disease.
The survival rate of cancer patients has dramatically increased since imaging devices are developed because it is easy to remove tumors by resection as early as doctors find out patient\'s disease.
>> CORRECT!
I believe that why life expendancy has increased is development of medical skills and technologies.
>> I believe that why life expentancy has increased is development of medical skills and technologies.
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