In your opinion, will terrorism spread or decline in the future?

2017-01-11 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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In my opinion, terrorism will decline in the future and should. I think that nowadays terrorism happens rarely but it is bigger than a past. I know that the whole world must strive to reduce terrorism and should think that it is not each country's problem. Because .the cause of most terrorism is wrong belief. So a target could be anyone, anywhere. I think that wrong thought and belief start from discrimination and indifference. For example, IS commits an act of terror. They have wrong belief that people who don't have some thought and belief should die. and I think if they have a person who has attention to them, the person notices that they have faulty thought and could help them. And sometimes when people discriminate other people because they have different idea , skin color and homeland. So they become angry and a terrorist. Therefore, We should understand and have interest to each other. And we must teach children that.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kim!

Thank you for your brave opinion about terrorism. Let\'s hope for peace in the world! Have a good day!^^

~Kelly^^

In my opinion, terrorism will decline in the future and should.

>> In my opinion, terrorism will and should decline in the future.
I think that nowadays terrorism happens rarely but it is bigger than a past.

>> Nowadays, I think that terrorism happens rarely, but it was more terrible than the past.
I know that the whole world must strive to reduce terrorism and should think that it is not each country\'s problem.

>> Correct.
Because .the cause of most terrorism is wrong belief.

>> Because the cause of most terrorism is wrong belief. 
I think that wrong thought and belief start from discrimination and indifference.
>>
I think that wrong thoughts and beliefs start from discrimination and indifference. 
For example, IS commits an act of terror.
>> 
For example, IS commits an act of terrorism.

They have wrong belief that people who don\'t have some thought and belief should die.
>> They have the wrong belief that people who don\'t have the same thoughts and beliefs should die.

and I think if they have a person who has attention to them, the person notices that they have faulty thought and could help them. 

>> I think, if people will just pay attention to them, they could help them.
And sometimes when people discriminate other people because they have different idea , skin color and homeland.
So they become angry and a terrorist. 

>> Sometimes, when people discriminate other people because they have a different idea, skin color and homeland, they get angry and become terrorists.
Therefore, We should understand and have interest to each other.

>> Therefore, we should understand each other and be concerned to one another.

And we must teach children that.
>> And we must teach that to children.

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