Independence day

2017-08-16 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Today is August 15th,Independenc day in Korea. On that day we pay sttribute to the people who fought for our country during japanese colonial era. also we memorize many people including comfort women, forced labors not to forget our heart memorizes in our country. i also thank to maartyrs' efforts. If they hadn't fought with japan we couldn't see beautiful place like now. And also today is special day to me. One of my favorite singers concert is today! I couldn't sleep all night long. I can't wait to see it. But it's raining outside, that mean I have to bring un umbrella. One more stuff will be put inside my bag. Anywawy August 15th will be the best day of my life.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ko[이름]!

August 15 is indeed the best day of your life. I bet you enjoyed the concert. Tell me more about it in class.

Have a great day!

~Kelly^^

Today is August 15th,Independenc day in Korea.

>> Today is August 15th, Independence day in Korea.
On that day we pay sttribute to the people who fought for our country during japanese colonial era.

>> On this day, we pay tribute to the people who fought for our country during the Japanese colonial era.
also we memorize many people including comfort women, forced labors not to forget our heart memorizes in our country.

>> Also, we pay tribute to the comfort women and laborers in our country. They always hold a special place in our hearts.

i also thank to maartyrs\' efforts.

>> I also thank the martyr\'s efforts.

If they hadn\'t fought with japan we couldn\'t see beautiful place like now. 

>> If they had not fought with Japan, we would not have a beautiful place to live in right now.
And also today is special day to me.

>> Also, today is a special day to me.
One of my favorite singers concert is today!

>> One of my favorite singers is going to have a concert today.
I couldn\'t sleep all night long.

>> Correct.
I can\'t wait to see it.

>> Correct.
But it\'s raining outside, that mean I have to bring un umbrella.

>> But it\'s raining outside, that means I have to bring an umbrella when I go out.

One more stuff will be put inside my bag.

>> I have to put one more stuff inside my bag.

Anywawy August 15th will be the best day of my life.

>> Anyway, August 15th will be the best day of my life.

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