Influence of family is stronger to young adults.

2014-08-26 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Hello Erine! Have a wonderful day:) There’s an old Korean saying “Those who stay close to darkness, also become dark.” It means people become whom they stay close to. In this sense I think family is the most important influence on young adults. It is because your family is not only those whom you stay close to but also the first ones to meet in your life time. First, home is your first school. You learn many things from your parents, house rules, small habits, life styles and so on. These aspects are built in you as you grow up and become your personality. Also people tend to feel more responsible to their family than their friends. This means family members’ opinion or situation could affect on your decisions. Therefore I believe influence of family is stronger than that of friends on young people. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Happy Tuesday once again, Chae Yoon!^^ Thank you for doing your homework again!^^ At this point, I can say that you were able to express your ideas a lot better!^^ How about for the other homework?^^ Continue doing a great job and as a piece of advice, try to refresh your mind with the usage of our punctuation marks. It will help you more when you write!^^ ~~Teacher Erine~~ Hello Erine! Have a wonderful day:)>> Correct.There’s an old Korean saying “Those who stay close to darkness, also become dark.” >> Threre is an old Korean saying, \"Those who stay close to darkness also become dark\". It means people become whom they stay close to. >> Correct. In this sense I think family is the most important influence on young adults. >> Correct. It is because your family is not only those whom you stay close to but also the first ones to meet in your life time. >> It is because your family members are not only those whom you stay close to but also the first ones you meet in your life. First, home is your first school. >> Correct. You learn many things from your parents, house rules, small habits, life styles and so on. >> You learn many things from your parents: house rules, small habits, lifestyle and so on. These aspects are built in you as you grow up and become your personality. >> Correct. Also people tend to feel more responsible to their family than their friends. >> People also tend to feel more responsible for their family than their friends. This means family members’ opinion or situation could affect on your decisions. >> This means family members\' opinion or situation could affect your decisions. Therefore I believe influence of family is stronger than that of friends on young  people.>> Therefore, I believe influence from the family is stronger than of the friends of young people.Thank you. >> Correct.

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