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2011-04-11 · 첨삭 강사 Faye

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I guarded Baengnyeong-island which place now more famous than before event that North-Korea fired South Korea's ship named Cheonan-military vessel like terror.long time ago, they had also same attacked to South Korea. So that area so danger.When I first join to Baengnyeong-island for guard, marine who have to guard Baengnyeong-island received special vacation so that meet their family and people you want to meet.We know how dangerous area we have to guard. . many people worry about me. But I don't think so. because it is my mission and I had responsibility guard the Baengnyeong-island and our south-Korea for peace. sometime I'm waited to fulfill my mission against provocation during military service. I never lost positive mind and maintain relation with our member and boss.

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I guarded Baengnyeong-island which place now more famous than before event that North-Korea fired South Korea's ship named Cheonan-military vessel like terror. long time ago, they had also same attacked to South Korea. So that area so danger. >> . When I was serving the Republic of Korea as a marine, I guarded Baengnyeong-island which is a famous place now because of the historical event that happened a long time ago. It was about North Korea attacking South Korea’s ship named Cheonan- a military vessel like terror. So that area was so dangerous. When I first join to Baengnyeong-island for guard, marine who have to guard Baengnyeong-island received special vacation so that meet their family and people you want to meet. >> . When I first joined guarding the Island, I received a special invitation to meet the family and other people there. We know how dangerous area we have to guard. many people worry about me. >> We knew that we were in a dangerous situation and that people were worried for us. But I don't think so. because it is my mission and I had responsibility guard the Baengnyeong-island and our south-Korea for peace. >> . But I didn’t think so because it was my mission and responsibility to guard the Island to maintain peace in South Korea.. sometime I'm waited to fulfill my mission against provocation during military service. >> Sometimes I patiently wait for fulfilling my mission in the military service against possibility of provocation. I never lost positive mind and maintain relation with our member and boss.  >> . I always kept a positive mind and maintained good relations with other members and boss.

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