Inner beauty
학생이 쓴 원문
As I told you in class, inner beauty is more crucial than appearance.
Positive thought, warm expressions and clever wisdom is one of the factors to attract people, making them respect to others.
Even though appearance is certainly important to get good impression firstly, it’s getting weaker and weaker.
When we do work and have a conversation, Inner capabilities and attitudes are necessary.
Thus, we need to be careful to retain prejudice related with appearance and judge by it.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ms. [Name] [이름]! I was particularly struck by your point about inner beauty. You beautifully conveyed how physical appearance doesn\'t tell the whole story about a person.Thank you for creating such a thoughtful and insightful composition.
~T. Jenna
As I told you in class, inner beauty is more crucial than appearance.
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>> Inner beauty, as I mentioned in class, is the true foundation of lasting connections and genuine happiness, far surpassing the fleeting appeal of mere appearance.
Positive thought, warm expressions and clever wisdom is one of the factors to attract people, making them respect to others.
>>Positive thoughts, warm expressions, and clever wisdom are factors that attract people and encourage them to respect others
Even though appearance is certainly important to get good impression firstly, it’s getting weaker and weaker.
Even though appearance is certainly important to get good impression firstly, it’s getting weaker and weaker.
>>Even though appearance is certainly important to get a good impression firstly, its impact eventually or gradually diminishes or lessens overtime.
When we do work and have a conversation, Inner capabilities and attitudes are necessary.
When we do work and have a conversation, Inner capabilities and attitudes are necessary.
>>When we work and have a conversation with others, inner capabilities and attitudes are necessary.
Thus, we need to be careful to retain prejudice related with appearance and judge by it.
Thus, we need to be careful to retain prejudice related with appearance and judge by it.
>>We need to be careful not to let appearance-based prejudice influence our judgments.
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