Interview script of international exchange student program

2021-08-12 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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1. When I’m in unfamiliar place, I’m very interested. When I meet new people, I can start a converstion first. Since I was a child, when I enrolled in new school, I didn’t have difficult. Instead, I was excited the new condition. Overseas country may be more unfamiliar. But I often traveled other countries. When I’m in them, I try to understand new culture. It is fun things to me. I loved the new mood, so I became to love abroad travel. Therefore, I can adapt in abroad life. 2. I think I’m like a whale which is king of the sea. I usually have leader position in any groups like whale. Whale’s load is all of sea. It is very wide. I have wide view like whale, so I can easily understand another culture. Whale is biggest in the sea. Even if my real body is small, but my mind is growing always. I always try to make my mind be biggest like a whale. Plus, I want to biggest expert in my job field in future too. *please let me know what contents are needed and omit.

강사 첨삭

Hi Minjun/Clara!

T. Irene

1.
When I’m in unfamiliar place, I’m very interested.

>>> I\'m very much interested in traveling to unfamiliar places.

When I meet new people, I can start a converstion first.

>>> When I meet new people, I always start the conversation first.

>> When meeting people for the first time, I always like initiating/starting the conversation.

Since I was a child, when I enrolled in new school, I didn’t have difficult.

>>> Since I was a child, I never had any difficulty talking or opening up to other students or children in my school.

Instead, I was excited the new condition.

>>> Whenever I go to a new school, I have always been excited with the thought of exploring a new environment.
Overseas country may be more unfamiliar. But I often traveled other countries.

>>> Places in other countries may also be so unfamiliar but I have experienced traveling abroad too.

When I’m in them, I try to understand new culture.

>>> Whenever I\'m in there, I try to study and understand the local people\'s culture.

It is fun things to me.

>>> I find that very interesting and enjoyable.

I loved the new mood, so I became to love abroad travel.

>>> This is the reason I got to love traveling abroad.
Therefore, I can adapt in abroad life.
>>> And for this same reason, I believe that I can easily adapt to a new life overseas.
2.
I think I’m like a whale which is king of the sea.

>>> I think I\'m like a whale which is considered to be the king of the sea.
I usually have leader position in any groups like whale.

>>> Like the whale, I\'m usually chosen as a leader.
Whale’s load is all of sea. It is very wide.

>>> This mammal rule the seas and oceans around the world. That\'s quite a huge kingdom.
I have wide view like whale, so I can easily understand another culture.

>>> Similarly, I am open to new experiences and knowledges so I am always eager to learn other country\'s culture.
Whale is biggest in the sea. Even if my real body is small, but my mind is growing always.

>>> Whales are the biggest animals in the sea and even though, I may not have such a body, my knowledge is constantly growing.
I always try to make my mind be biggest like a whale.

>>> I\'m striving to make my mind as big as the whale.
Plus, I want to biggest expert in my job field in future too.

>>> That means I want to be the number one expert in my field in the future.

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