introduce my freind
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I want to introduce one of my friend to you. She is the best friend in the university.
She is 172cm and I am 157cm. We look like gangling and dwarf. (Is 'dwarf' swear word??)
She has a freewheeling lifestyle. I like her lifestyle. I have a tendency to tie down stereotype, example timetable and habits. I feel free when I hang out her.
She shows an indecisive attitude. When we eat something, she decides menu for 15 minutes. I am fun when She seriously think about menu.
She is usually shy without when she watches baseball game. We went to see a baseball game two weeks ago. Our team hit home run! and won the game. She yelled encouragement at the players, but I couldn't. because I was shy. The game was my first baseball game.
thank you for reading! ^_^
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
I can’t imagine you together with your best friend,
the thought of it is cute though.
Thank you for sharing, here are the grammar corrections:
Smile,
Connie
I want to introduce one of my friend to you.
>> I want to introduce one of my friends to you.
She is the best friend in the university.
>> Correct^^She is 172cm and I am 157cm.
>> She is 172cms. in height and I am 157cms.
We look like gangling and dwarf. (Is 'dwarf' swear word??)
>> We look like a gangling and a dwarf. (no it is no a bad word, it’s just okay to use)She has a freewheeling lifestyle.
>> Correct^^
I like her lifestyle.
>> Correct^^
I have a tendency to tie down stereotype, example timetable and habits.
>> I have a tendency to tie down my stereotype, for example my timetable and habits.
I feel free when I hang out her.
>> I feel free when I hang out with her. She shows an indecisive attitude.
>> Correct^^
When we eat something, she decides menu for 15 minutes.
>> When we eat something, she decides for the menu for about 15 minutes.
I am fun when She seriously think about menu.
>> I’m doing it for fun but she is seriously dealing with the menu. She is usually shy without when she watches baseball game.
>> Correct^^
We went to see a baseball game two weeks ago.
>> Correct^^
Our team hit home run! And won the game.
>> Our team hit a home run, and we won the game!!
She yelled encouragement at the players, but I couldn't. because I was shy.
>> She cheered for the players but I couldn’t because I was so shy.
The game was my first baseball game.
>> That was my first baseball game.thank you for reading! ^_^
>> It’s my pleasure, thank you for sharing ^_^
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