introduce my freind

2010-07-29 · 첨삭 강사 Shy

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I want to introduce one of my friend to you. She is the best friend in the university. She is 172cm and I am 157cm. We look like gangling and dwarf. (Is 'dwarf' swear word??) She has a freewheeling lifestyle. I like her lifestyle. I have a tendency to tie down stereotype, example timetable and habits. I feel free when I hang out her. She shows an indecisive attitude. When we eat something, she decides menu for 15 minutes. I am fun when She seriously think about menu. She is usually shy without when she watches baseball game. We went to see a baseball game two weeks ago. Our team hit home run! and won the game. She yelled encouragement at the players, but I couldn't. because I was shy. The game was my first baseball game. thank you for reading! ^_^

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름], I can’t imagine you together with your best friend,  the thought of it is cute though. Thank you for sharing, here are the grammar corrections: Smile, Connie   I want to introduce one of my friend to you. >> I want to introduce one of my friends to you. She is the best friend in the university. >> Correct^^She is 172cm and I am 157cm. >> She is 172cms.  in height and I am 157cms. We look like gangling and dwarf. (Is 'dwarf' swear word??) >> We look like a gangling and a dwarf.  (no it is no a bad word, it’s just okay to use)She has a freewheeling lifestyle. >> Correct^^ I like her lifestyle. >> Correct^^ I have a tendency to tie down stereotype, example timetable and habits. >>  I have a tendency to tie down my stereotype, for example my timetable and habits.  I feel free when I hang out her. >> I feel free when I hang out with her. She shows an indecisive attitude. >> Correct^^ When we eat something, she decides menu for 15 minutes. >> When we eat something, she decides for the menu for about 15 minutes. I am fun when She seriously think about menu. >> I’m doing it for fun but she is seriously dealing with the menu. She is usually shy without when she watches baseball game. >> Correct^^ We went to see a baseball game two weeks ago. >> Correct^^ Our team hit home run! And won the game. >> Our team hit a home run, and we won the game!!  She yelled encouragement at the players, but I couldn't. because I was shy. >> She cheered for the players but I couldn’t because I was so shy.  The game was my first baseball game. >> That was my first baseball game.thank you for reading! ^_^ >> It’s my pleasure, thank you for sharing ^_^

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