Introduce myself

2018-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

My name is [Name]. I majored in Visual communication Design. I have worked experience about design academy lecturer nearly 5 years. I can communicate to everyone no matter how old they are. while I was working there, I enjoyed meeting with various students and their parents too. I have learned how to communicate and feel sympathetic for someone's mind deeply. It was a really good experience for me. and when I was university student, I worked as a waitress at a cafe and restaurant for many years. so I learned how to communicate with various customers. and I can understand how to satisfy of customer's needs. If I have chance, this opportunity helped me to developed more, and especially with my positive mind and lively personality in my service. and trust towards customer's in a professional way. I really dream to be a flight attendant. I can definability do that. so I hope that you like my experience and thank you for listening.

강사 첨삭

Hi there~! It was great to have a class with you today! Check out my corrections and apply them next time! ^^

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

My name is [Name].

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I majored in Visual communication Design.

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 I have worked experience about design academy lecturer nearly 5 years.

>> I have a work experience as a design academy lecturer for nearly 5 years.
 I can communicate to everyone no matter how old they are.

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 while I was working there, I enjoyed meeting with various students and their parents too.

 >>While I was working there, I enjoyed meeting with various students and their parents too.

>>CORRECT
 I have learned how to communicate and feel sympathetic for someone\'s mind deeply.

>> I have learned how to communicate and sympathize someone\'s mind deeply.
 It was a really good experience for me.

>>CORRECT
 and when I was university student, I worked as a waitress at a cafe and restaurant for many years. so I learned how to communicate with various customers. and I can understand how to satisfy of customer\'s needs.

>>When I was a university student, I worked as a waitress at a cafe and restaurant for many years. so I learned how to communicate with various customers. and I can understand how to satisfy customer\'s needs.
 If I have chance, this opportunity helped me to developed more, and especially with my positive mind and lively personality in my service. and trust towards customer\'s in a professional way.

>> If I have a chance, this opportunity will help me to improve more, and especially with my positive mind and lively personality in my service, and trust towards customer\'s in a professional way.

I really dream to be a flight attendant. 

>>CORRECT
I can definability do that.

>>CORRECT
so I hope that you like my experience and thank you for listening.

>>So I hope that you be impressed with my experience and thank you for listening.

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