introduce myself.
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
Thank you for today’s work!
Please keep up the good work!
Have a nice day and talk to you later!
Teacher ELLY.
introduce myself.
>>How to introduce myself.
or>>Self introduction.
* Why do you want to be a flight attendant?
flight attendant can have a wide view of the world.
>>A flight attendant can get a wide view of the world.
or>>A flight attendant has a chance to see the world.
that must be helful to live.
>>This is very helpful in one’s life.
or>>This can help a person become more knowledgeable and even more successful in life.
*why do you think we should hire you?
I have some experiences in the service field.
CORRECT!
or>>I got a few experiences in the customer service field.
It was a really good chance to know working in service field makes me happy.
>>It was a really good chance for me to know that working in the service field can give me a lot of happiness.
Based on these experiences, I can offer a better service to the passengers.
CORRECT!
or>>Because of my previous experiences in the service industry, I can serve the passengers with more care and excellence.
*Do you think your personality suits this job?
Um.. while studying social welfare, I learned that I try not to judge people with prejudice.
>>While studying social welfare, I learned that I should not treat people with prejudice.
or>>I learned from my social welfare classes that I should not treat people with prejudice.
My personality is very sociable.
CORRECT!
or>>I have a very sociable personality.
or>>I am a very sociable person.
I can easily socialize with other people.
CORRECT!
or>>I get along well with other people and connect with them easily.
During the flight , I think passengers feel relaxed and comfortable with me.
>>During a flight, I think the passengers will be more relaxed and comfortable with me.
or>> During a flight, I can easily help the passengers feel more relaxed and comfortable with me.
*weakness
I like to make sure that my work is perfect, so I spend a lot of time checking it.
CORRECT!
or>>I am a perfectionist when it comes to my work, so I take extra time in going over them.
People can think I’m slow.
CORRECT!
or>>People may think I’m slower than most.
However I try to prevent my work from being too slow.
>>However, I try to prevent myself from being too slow in doing my tasks.
Foe example, I always set mt time , and I make plans.
or>>For example, I always set a time frame for every task, and I make plans.
*do you have learned from your trips?
I realized the importance of language and wanted to learn by communicating with
>>I realize the importance of a foreign language, so I wanted to learn by communicating with other people.
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