introduce myself.

2018-10-10 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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* Why do you want to be a flight attendant? flight attendant can have a wide view of the world. that must be helful to live. *why do you think we should hire you? I have some experiences in the service field. It was a really good chance to know working in service field makes me happy.Based on these experiences, I can offer a better service to the passengers. *Do you think your personality suits this job? Um.. while studying social welfare, I learned that I try not to judge people with prejudice. My personality is very sociable. i can easily socialize with other people. During the flight , I think passengers feel relaxed and comfortable with me. *weakness I like to make sure that my work is perfect, so I spend a lot of time checking it. People can think I’m slow. However I try to prevent my work from being too slow. Foe example, I always set mt time , and I make plans. *do you have learned from your trips? I realized the importance of language and wanted to learn by communicating with

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

Thank you for today’s work!

Please keep up the good work!

Have a nice day and talk to you later!

Teacher ELLY.

introduce myself.

>>How to introduce myself.

or>>Self introduction.

* Why do you want to be a flight attendant?

 flight attendant can have a wide view of the world.

>>A flight attendant can get a wide view of the world.

or>>A flight attendant has a chance to see the world.

 that must be helful to live.

>>This is very helpful in one’s life.

or>>This can help a person become more knowledgeable and even more successful in life.

 *why do you think we should hire you?

I have some experiences in the service field.

CORRECT!

or>>I got a few experiences in the customer service field.

It was a really good chance to know working in service field makes me happy.

>>It was a really good chance for me to know that working in the service field can give me a lot of happiness.

Based on these experiences, I can offer a better service to the passengers.

CORRECT!

or>>Because of my previous experiences in the service industry, I can serve the passengers with more care and excellence.

 *Do you think your personality suits this job?

 Um.. while studying social welfare, I learned that I try not to judge people with prejudice.

>>While studying social welfare, I learned that I should not treat people with prejudice.

or>>I learned from my social welfare classes that I should not treat people with prejudice.

My personality is very sociable.

CORRECT!

or>>I have a very sociable personality.

or>>I am a very sociable person.

I can easily socialize with other people.

CORRECT!

or>>I get along well with other people and connect with them easily.

During the flight , I think passengers feel relaxed and comfortable with me.

>>During a flight, I think the passengers will be more relaxed and comfortable with me.

or>> During a flight, I can easily help the passengers feel more relaxed and comfortable with me.

 *weakness

I like to make sure that my work is perfect, so I spend a lot of time checking it.

CORRECT!

or>>I am a perfectionist when it comes to my work, so I take extra time in going over them.

People can think I’m slow.

CORRECT!

or>>People may think I’m slower than most.

However I try to prevent my work from being too slow.

>>However, I try to prevent myself from being too slow in doing my tasks.

Foe example, I always set mt time , and I make plans.

or>>For example, I always set a time frame for every task, and I make plans.

 *do you have learned from your trips?

 I realized the importance of language and wanted to learn by communicating with

>>I realize the importance of a foreign language, so I wanted to learn by communicating with other people.

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