Introduce myself(home work)

2013-02-15 · 첨삭 강사 Aurora

학생이 쓴 원문

In university, I majored inInternational trade and economic cooperation. I studied the overall trend and detailed workings of the world economy. After enlisting in the army, I always kept near me the books and movies about different cultures and histories. Through them, I tried to understand the difference between their cultures and ours. I had a precious experience to manage an honorable discharge ceremony for a general with U.S. army. My main mission was to manage all the process of firing a cannon salute. Because of the difference of procedure for the ceremony, it was the most difficult mission that I had gotten before. However, I can learn the importance of understanding cultural difference between other countries in this case. Moreover, I have learnt a lot about leadership for 6 years of service, and then now I became a good leader. I'm confident that my experiences and my qualities make me the best candidate for this job. And I'm really ready for accomplishing all tasks that will be under my responsibility. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hi Mac.Good job on your composition. I\'d say, it\'s much better than your answer yesterday. Anyway, I\'m looking forward to our class later. Talk to you later! T. Aurora In university, I majored inInternational trade and economic cooperation. >>Correct!  I studied the overall trend and detailed workings of the world economy. >>Correct!  After enlisting in the army, I always kept near me the books and movies about different cultures and histories. >> After enlisting in the army, I always kept my books near me as well as movies about different cultures and histories. Through them, I tried to understand the difference between their cultures and ours. >>Correct!I had a precious experience to manage an honorable discharge ceremony for a general with U.S. army. >>I had a precious experience to manage an honorable discharge ceremony for a general of the U.S. army. My main mission was to manage all the process of firing a cannon salute. >>Correct!  Because of the difference of procedure for the ceremony, it was the most difficult mission that I had gotten before. >>Correct!  However, I can learn the importance of understanding cultural difference between other countries in this case. >> However, I had learned the importance of understanding cultural difference between other countries.  Moreover, I have learnt a lot about leadership for 6 years of service, and then now I became a good leader. >> Moreover, I have learnt a lot about leadership after 6 years of service, and  now I became a good leader.  I\'m confident that my experiences and my qualities make me the best candidate for this job. >>I\'m confident that my experiences and my qualities has made me the best candidate for this job. And I\'m really ready for accomplishing all tasks that will be under my responsibility. Thank you. >>Correct!

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