Introducing myself

2023-03-01 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

학생이 쓴 원문

1. Tell me about yourself. First of all, thank you for giving me this opportunity. I am honored to be with you today from one of the finest Steel manufacturing companies in the world. Let me introduce myself. I’m currently working as a freight forwarder for 5 years, and I’m responsible for exporting shipments One of my strengths is a trouble shooting skill. I’ve been responsible for resolving various irregular occasions such as space issue, equipment shortage, and vessel delay. I’m sure that this experience is going to be pretty useful when dealing with the international regulatory issues. When it comes to my character, I would like to say that I am a positive person. I have a positive mindset, so, I always try to think positively even in the worst situation. I strongly believe that honesty is number one value when doing business. So, I always try to comply with the basics and the principles while improving working efficiency.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!
Thank you for trusting me to correct your writing. I wish you the best for the interview! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

First of all, thank you for giving me this opportunity. I am honored to be with you today from one of the finest Steel manufacturing companies in the world.
>>First of all, thank you for giving me this opportunity. I am honored to be having an interview with one of the finest Steel manufacturing companies in the world.
Let me introduce myself. I’m currently working as a freight forwarder for 5 years, and I’m responsible for exporting shipments.
>>CORRECT!
One of my strengths is a trouble shooting skill. I’ve been responsible for resolving various irregular occasions such as space issue, equipment shortage, and vessel delay. 
>>One of my strengths is trouble shooting. I’ve been responsible for resolving various irregularities such as space issues, equipment shortages, and vessel delays. 
I’m sure that this experience is going to be pretty useful when dealing with the international regulatory issues.
>>CORRECT!
When it comes to my character, I would like to say that I am a positive person. 
>>CORRECT!
I have a positive mindset, so, I always try to think positively even in the worst situation.
>>CORRECT!
I strongly believe that honesty is number one value when doing business. So, I always try to comply with the basics and the principles while improving working efficiency.
>>I strongly believe that honesty is the number one value when doing business. So, I always try to comply with the basics and the principles while improving working efficiency.

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