introducing myself another version 1

First of all, do I look like a small boy? I'm sure you think as I say. But, now I give you an idea about who really I am. First, let me start by saying about my fucture. I want to grow up as a global leader. That is a diplomat officaial like 반기문. I have had the dream since I was young. At that time, I could ave a chance of being exposed to English. because some relatives lived in another country such as ~~. So, It was easy for me to approach English. That's why I had interestd in English, and then Since I was in an elementary school I have studided english so hard all by myself. Thus I can say clearly my English is unique, special, and different compared to anoter person.

Hello Mr. [이름]!

Wow. I think this composition has expressed your thoughts about reaching your dream.

 Great job! You can also add some plans that you want the world to achieve by the time you are a diplomatic officer. Anyway, I think you did great! ^^

Karla

 

First of all, do I look like a small boy?

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I'm sure you think as I say.

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But, now I give you an idea about who really I am.

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First, let me start by saying about my fucture.

>>First, let me start by saying about my future.

I want to grow up as a global leader.

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That is a diplomat officaial like 반기문.

>>That is a diplomat official like
I have had the dream since I was young.

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At that time, I could ave a chance of being exposed to English.

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because some relatives lived in another country such as ~~.

>>CORRECT

So, It was easy for me to approach English.

>>CORRECT

That's why I had interestd in English, and then Since I was in an elementary school I have studided english so hard all by myself.

>>That's why I had interest in Englihs, and then since I was in elementary school I have studied English so hard all by myself.

Thus I can say clearly my English is unique, special, and different compared to anoter person.

>>Thus I can say clearly my English is unique, special and different compared to other people.