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2010-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

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I would like to introduce myself with 2 words. First, I’m a global player. I traveled to India for a month, and studied in Alabama, U.S. In both situations, there was hard to find Korean or Korean market. But I was and still is willing to adjust to new environment, meeting various people and which made me understand their culture.

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Hi [이름]!

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I would like to introduce myself with 2 words.

>>I would like to introduce myself in 2 words.
First, I’m a global player.

I traveled to India for a month, and studied in Alabama, U.S.

>>I traveled to India for a month, and studied in US, Alabama.

In both situations, there was hard to find Korean or Korean market.

>>During those times, It was hard to meet Koreans and Korean groceries or market.

But I was and still is willing to adjust to new environment, meeting various people and which made me understand their culture.

>>But I survived with my willingness to learn and adjust to a new environment. 

I've met various people with diffirent cultures and it helped me a alot to understand their way of living.

 

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