Introduction myself
학생이 쓴 원문
My name is [Name][이름], Ha which is rarely used as a name for a woman. Thus, some people feels strong impression at first when I tell my name to them. However, in contrast to this impression, I am a kind of a clam person. I love to go for a walk with my friend rather than drinking together. I like a person who likes animals, especially cats because my parents have raised a cat since I rescued him on a street. I also fond of watching any kinds of movies, except horror ones.
In a long term, I want to be an artist. When I was young I was likely to spend time sitting on a desk while drawing or writing something. Until now, I am not sure what it could be but I've decided to go further. That is why I applied a college in UK to take a Master courses of Fine Arts.
I am also interested in learning English to communicate people from various areas. For me, a difficulty in learning English is conversation. Sometimes, I can't get a point of what people are saying. However, reading is better than speaking in English.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for your composition! It\'s nice to get to know you better through this writing. I\'m happy that you are fond of animals. I am, too. However, I am more into dogs than cats. I have a pair of Japanese Spitz and they\'ve been with me since 2008. I like watching movies as well as dramas. Anyway, I wish you good luck in your endeavor. We have only this month to speak with each other, but I do hope that you\'re going to enjoy your classes with me. Take care and see you later!
T. JanE ^^
My name is [Name][이름], Ha which is rarely used as a name for a woman.
>> My name is [Name][이름] Ha, which is rarely used as a name for a woman.
Thus, some people feels strong impression at first when I tell my name to them.
>> Thus, some people get a strong first impression of me when I tell them my name.
However, in contrast to this impression, I am a kind of a clam person.
>> However, in contrast to this impression, I am a calm person.
I love to go for a walk with my friend rather than drinking together.
>> I love going for a walk with my friend rather than drinking.
I like a person who likes animals, especially cats because my parents have raised a cat since I rescued him on a street.
>> I\'m a person who likes animals, especially cats, because my parents have a raised a cat since I rescued it on the street.
I also fond of watching any kinds of movies, except horror ones.
>> I am also fond of watching any kind of movies, except horror ones.
In a long term, I want to be an artist.
>> My long term goal is to become an artist.
When I was young I was likely to spend time sitting on a desk while drawing or writing something.
>> Correct
Until now, I am not sure what it could be but I\'ve decided to go further.
>> Correct
That is why I applied a college in UK to take a Master courses of Fine Arts.
>> That is why I applied in a college in the UK to take a Master\'s degree in Fine Arts.
I am also interested in learning English to communicate people from various areas.
>> I am also interested in learning English to communicate with people from various areas.
For me, a difficulty in learning English is conversation.
>> For me, the difficult thing about learning English is having conversation.
Sometimes, I can\'t get a point of what people are saying.
>> Sometimes, I can\'t get the point of what people are saying.
However, reading is better than speaking in English.
>> I can do better in reading than in speaking in English.
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