introduction of yourself

2025-02-21 · 첨삭 강사 Trixia

학생이 쓴 원문

I’m Hyuna [이름] and my English name is Isabelle. When I sayed it, People asked me if I’m christian. because ‘Isabelle’ sounds like a baptismal name. but I’m not. I just liked it and decided to do it. I\'m 29 years old in Korea age. I from south korea and I lived in ‘Asan’ my whole life. I am currently working as a designer. and my main job is developing patterns for tiles like wood or stone, texture design. I’m satisfied with my current job. but I’m also exploring other opportunities to work at a better company. I aim to work for a company that will provide me with a stable finance and position. My hobby is hiking. There are a lot of mountains in my country, and I love going to them. Being in the forest make me feel so peaceful and It’s also fun to go with friends, have a picnic, and chat together. I usually go to a mountain near my house. and I try to go whenever I have free time.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Isabelle!
Thank you for your hard work! ^^ Great job sharing about yourself! Just watch for word choices and sentence flow. Here are some refinements for clarity and natural phrasing.

\"sayed\" → \"said\" (past tense correction)
\"People\" → \"people\" (no capital letter needed)
\"I from South Korea\" → \"I am from South Korea\" (missing verb)
\"in Korea age\" → \"in Korean age\" (natural phrasing)
\"developing patterns for tiles like wood or stone, texture design.\" → \"developing tile patterns that resemble wood and stone.\" (more natural)
\"Being in the forest make me feel\" → \"Being in the forest makes me feel\" (subject-verb agreement)

Your content is great—these small tweaks will make it even smoother!

CONTENT:
I’m Hyuna [이름] and my English name is Isabelle.
- CORRECT.
When I sayed it, People asked me if I’m christian.
because ‘Isabelle’ sounds like a baptismal name.
but I’m not. 
- When I said it, people asked me if I’m Christian
because ‘Isabelle’ sounds like a baptismal name,
but I’m not. 
I just liked it and decided to do it.
-  I just liked it and decided to use it.

I\'m 29 years old in Korea age.
- I\'m 29 years old in Korean age.

I from south korea and I lived in ‘Asan’ my whole life.
- I am from South Korea, and I have lived in ‘Asan’ my whole life.

I am currently working as a designer. and my main job is developing patterns for tiles like wood or stone, texture design.
- I am currently working as a designer,
and my main job is developing patterns for tiles like wood and stone textures.
I’m satisfied with my current job.
but I’m also exploring other opportunities to work at a better company.
- I’m satisfied with my current job,
but I’m also exploring other opportunities to work at a better company.
I aim to work for a company that will provide me with a stable finance and position.
- CORRECT.

My hobby is hiking.
- CORRECT.
There are a lot of mountains in my country, and I love going to them.
- CORRECT.
Being in the forest make me feel so peaceful and It’s also fun to go with friends, have a picnic, and chat together.
Being in the forest makes me feel so peaceful, and it’s also fun to go with friends, have a picnic, and chat together.
I usually go to a mountain near my house.
and I try to go whenever I have free time.
- I usually go to a mountain near my house, and I try to go whenever I have free time.

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