Invent a New Holiday: Invent a new holiday. What would this holiday celebrate? How would you celebra

2015-06-25 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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I invent a movie's day on October 26th.This holiday will show the movie for free. And it show the famous movies in theaters.Also,we can know the movies to the movie exhibition.All people can know and see the movie.And on October the food wrapping paper will be appear movie's character such as Lorlax,Marida. <Diary> Title:6 25 War Today is a 6 25 War.In 1950,North Korea and South Korea fight for 3years. Many people dead and our country are divided two country.Until now,we don't unification.

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Hi [이름]! ^^ Thank you for answering your homework!   It\'s so great to have a \"Movie Day\" Holiday someday! This will be a time for relaxation and for relieving stress. Friends, relatives and love one\'s will be invited because it\'s for free! Yeheyy!I hope North Korea and South Korea will be united. Peace should be scattered and dispersed around the world for beautiful living. Right? Peace cannot be achieved through violence, it can only be attained through understanding. Those who are at war with others are not at peace withthemselves.                                 ~~~~~T. Kris~~~~     I invent a movie\'s day on October 26th. >> I will invent  a  \"Movie Day\" holiday and it will be on October 26.   This holiday will show the movie for free. >> On this holiday, the movie will be shown and watched for free.    And it show the famous movies in theaters. >> The famous movies will be shown in theaters.   Also,we can know the movies to the movie exhibition. >> We can also view these movies in the movie exhibition.   All people can know and see the movie. >> People will be able to watch the  movie.   And on October the food wrapping paper will be appear movie\'s character such as Lorlax,Marida. >> The food wrapping paper will be formed as movie characters such as Lorlax and Marida.   <Diary>Title:6 25 War Today is a 6 25 War. >> Today is the 625th war between North Korea and South Korea.   In 1950, North Korea and South Korea fight for 3years. >> In 1950, North Korea and South Korea fought for 3 years.   Many people dead and our country are divided two country. >> Many people died and our country was  divided into two.   Until now,we don\'t unification. >> Until now we\'re not united.

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