invention

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When I have a class with student teacher, I learned about various kinds of inventions.

>> When I had a class with the student teacher, I learned about various kind of inventions.

 Inventions are intended to help people with difficulties in life, and engineering inventions.

>> CORRECT

I made the most impressive day that I was able to move around with a great deal of water.

>>DID YOU MEAN: I became very impressive that day when I was able to move around with a great deal of water.

So I wanted to make an invention that could help others.

>>CORRECT

Young children always try to express their will by crying when they need help.　

>> Children always try to express their feelings when they need help by crying.

But if that happens when parents are in another room, it will be difficult for children to express their will.

>> But if it happens and their parents are in another room, it will be difficult for them to express what they want.

So if I have a device that can detect the sound, I think it would be easier to go somewhere else.　

>> So I decided to invent a device that can detect sound. I think it would be easier to go somewhere else.
The reason I thought I had to make this product was because of my experience two years ago.

>>CORRECT

I was taking care of my cousin at my grandfather\'s house two years ago at the request of my uncle.

>>DID YOU MEAN: My uncle requested me to take care of my cousin at my grandfather\'s house.

 But when I was in the bathroom for a while, the child fell from the bed and was crying.

>>When I was in the bathroom for a while, the child fell from the bed and was crying.

 I did not know this because I was in the bathroom and came out and was surprised to be crying.

>> I didn\'t notice this because I was in the bathroom and when I came out I was very surprised that the child was already crying.