Investment opportunity.

2020-12-07 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

학생이 쓴 원문

In conclusion, I am personally not at all interested in money or investment. My only concern is to learn something for Education and to give someone what I have learned. Because I am an educator and a Christian. I remember what I said before , \' If I can eat three meals a day and buy a cup of coffee to someone, I think that is enough.\' However, there was only one investment opportunity before. It was that my acquaintance asked me to buy a old house. I couldn\'t refuse it, so I bought it. Wow, that is awesome!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] Ha!
Thank you for the effort you put in your composition.
I know that you may not have been exposed to the topic.
It was a good try and I have to commend you for it.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
In conclusion, I am personally not at all interested in money or investment.
>> I am personally not at all interested in money or investment.
My only concern is to learn something for Education and to give someone what I have learned.
>> My only concern is to learn something for educational purposes and to share with someone what I have learned.
Because I am an educator and a Christian.
>> This is because I\'m an educator and a Christian. 
I remember what I said before , \' If I can eat three meals a day and buy a cup of coffee to someone, I think that is enough.\'
>> I remember what I said before , \' If I can eat three meals a day and buy a cup of coffee for someone, I think that is enough.\'
However, there was only one investment opportunity before.
>> Correct
It was that my acquaintance asked me to buy a old house.
>> It was when my acquaintance asked me to buy an old house.
I couldn\'t refuse it, so I bought it.
>> Correct
Wow, that is awesome!
>> Correct

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