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In Korea, we have very weeeeeeak law.
So when they commit crime such as rape, violence and drunk driving I hope we could see some records of their crime. Then we could be careful from them and then bury them in this society cannot live as a humanbeing~
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In Korea, we have very weeeeeeak law.
>> In Korea, we have very weak laws.
So when they commit crime such as rape, violence and drunk driving I hope we could see some records of their crime.
>> So when they commit crimes such as rape, violence and drunk driving. I hope we could see some records of their crime.
Then we could be careful from them and then bury them in this society cannot live as a humanbeing~
>> Then we should be careful from them. Then, we can bury them in this society. They cannot live as a human being.
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