Is a perfect society possible?

2018-11-13 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think perfect society is impossible. First of all, nobody is perfect. What I mean is that perfect people can make perfect society but if people are not perfect, they cannot make perfect society. God didn't make perfect person. Also,there haven't been a perfect society in history. Every society always has problems like environmental pollution, economical situations and law of slavery and so on. It means there is no perfect society in the world. We usually expect perfect society waching our history back, it proves perfect society is impossible.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! ^_^v
Thank you very much for writing another essay.
I appreciate your effort and your diligence in writing.
I believe that even if it is difficult, it is possible to achieve a perfect society.
I hope you\'re having a great night.
See you in class later. :*
~Teacher Charry


I think perfect society is impossible.

>> I think a perfect society is impossible.
First of all, nobody is perfect.

>> CORRECT!

What I mean is that perfect people can make perfect society but if people are not perfect, they cannot make perfect society.

>> What I mean is that, perfect people can make a perfect society but if people are not perfect, they cannot make a perfect society.

God didn\'t make perfect person.

>> God didn\'t make a perfect person.
Also,there haven\'t been a perfect society in history.

>> Also,there hasn\'t been a perfect society in history.

Every society always has problems like environmental pollution, economical situations and law of slavery and so on.

>> Every society always has problems like environmental pollution, economical problems, slavery and so on.

It means there is no perfect society in the world.

>> CORRECT!

We usually expect perfect society waching our history back, it proves perfect society is impossible.

>> We usually expect for a perfect society and looking to our history, it proves that a perfect society is impossible.



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