Is adventure important in your life? Why?

2015-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Some people enjoy experiencing an adventure while others do not want to experience one. They have their own reason for their decision. Those who enjoy adventure say that it makes thier life exciting. On the other hand, the opposite say that they want to live their lives with safety. In my case, I am for the opinion that adventure is important in our life. Of course, I am also worried about starting a new things because I do not know well whether the result will be good or bad. But I believe that adventure is required to improve our life. By challenging new things, we might experience failure, but that's not all. We also can get new ability to process the work that we have not experienced before and if we manage the work successfully, our career will be improved. In addition, We can get confidence through the process of challenge. For these various reasons, I am sure that adventure is essential in our life. Don't be afraid of challenge, and you will attain more valuable things.

강사 첨삭

Hi Miss [이름]! Life is indeed an adventure so we should be brave in accpeting all the challenges that come our way. As you said, we should not be afraid. Enjoy life\'s adventure.^^ ~Kelly^^ Some people enjoy experiencing an adventure while others do not want to experience one. >> Some people enjoy experiencing an adventure while others don\'t. They have their own reason for their decision. >> Correct. Those who enjoy adventure say that it makes thier life exciting. >> Those who enjoy adventure say that it makes their life exciting. On the other hand, the opposite say that they want to live their lives with safety. >> Correct. >> or: On the other hand, the opposite say that they want to live their lives safely.   In my case, I am for the opinion that adventure is important in our life. >> In my case, I am in favor of the opinion that adventure is important in our life.Of course, I am also worried about starting a new things because I do not know well whether the result will be good or bad. >> Of course, I am also worried about starting new things because I do not know well whether the result will be good or bad.  But I believe that adventure is required to improve our life. >> Correct. By challenging new things, we might experience failure, but that\'s not all. >> In accepting new things, we might experience failure, but that\'s not all. We also can get new ability to process the work that we have not experienced before and if we manage the work successfully, our career will be improved. >> We can also gain the ability to process work that we have not experienced before and if we manage it successfully, our career will be improved. In addition, We can get confidence through the process of challenge. >> In addition, We can get confidence through the process of that challenge. For these various reasons, I am sure that adventure is essential in our life. >> Correct. Don\'t be afraid of challenge, and you will attain more valuable things. >> Correct.

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