Is anger ever a good thing? If so, when? Why? --------------------- Have a great weekend!
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Sometimes I need to be angry. because I can make a better relationship with people when I express my thoughts directly. ​but expressing this behavior is not easy for me. Before I act on something, I often think a lot about it. I just want to find the best way to connect with people who are picky. I need to learn how to be angry wisely. When I speak out, I need courage and confidence. If we are just angry at people who are rude, we will be the same person. I learn how to form relationships with people through counseling. My counselor usually advises me that I have to say firmly without being impolite to people who are rude. In addition, if a relationship with someone offers me hardship or suffering constantly, I need to check this relationship which means it is healthy. If not, I can decide to stop connecting with people who give me suffering. This is the best decision for everyone. It is important that when I am angry with people, I have to be aware of what I need and where my mind is.
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Hello, Jane! Thank you for being open about your anger management and how you see it! I feel like you are also giving me counseling!-Faith-
Sometimes I need to be angry. because I can make a better relationship with people when I express my thoughts directly. >> Sometimes I need to be angry because I can make a better relationship with other people when I express my thoughts directly.
​but expressing this behavior is not easy for me.
>> But expressing this behavior is not easy for me.
Before I act on something, I often think a lot about it.
>> CORRECT
OR I consider something carefully before reacting on it.
I just want to find the best way to connect with people who are picky.
>> CORRECT
I need to learn how to be angry wisely.
>> CORRECT
OR I must learn how to be angry reasonably.
When I speak out, I need courage and confidence.
>> CORRECT
If we are just angry at people who are rude, we will be the same person.
>> CORRECT
OR If we are just angry at rude people, that won\'t make us different from them.
I learn how to form relationships with people through counseling.
>> CORRECT
OR I learn how to develop relationships with others through counseling.
My counselor usually advises me that I have to say firmly without being impolite to people who are rude.
>> My counselor usually advises me that I have to say things firmly without being impolite to people who are rude.
In addition, if a relationship with someone offers me hardship or suffering constantly, I need to check this relationship which means it is healthy.
>> In addition, if a relationship with someone offers me hardship or suffering constantly, I need to check this relationship if it is still healthy.
If not, I can decide to stop connecting with people who give me suffering.
>> If not, I can decide to stop connecting with this person who gives me suffering.
This is the best decision for everyone.
>> CORRECT
It is important that when I am angry with people, I have to be aware of what I need and where my mind is.
>> It is important that when I am angry with someone, I have to be aware of what I need and where my mind is.
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