Is charity a good thing? Do you think money is the best way to help needy people?

2017-12-18 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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First, when I was young, I have given money to the bagger on the road. I thought it might help them for a living. But now, I think they just sell their pride instead of working for earning money since disable people who only have a hand or leg also work for a living if they have a passion for a living. Furthermore, I realized it hasn’t been able to encourage them when I have read an article that they prefer to buy alcohol better than buy foods. Second, various of organization gather money from the others. And they send only few amounts to the people who needed to get help or just corrupt it. Regarding of Africa, money might not be reached to the people who don’t have enough abilities having meals day by day since it will be corrupted by rich people in Africa. I have watched news about these issues. Therefore, purpose of the charity is good but it not good way only gather money for them. It should be better to buy the thing that they need and visit them for a help.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Jason!

No matter how pitiful beggars appear, I don\'t give them financial help.

I believe that there are more ways to give them a hand.

See you~

First, when I was young, I have given money to the bagger on the road.

>>First, when I was young, I gave money to the beggar on the road.


I thought it might help them for a living.

>>I thought it might help them.

 But now, I think they just sell their pride instead of working for earning money since disable people who only have a hand or leg also work for a living if they have a passion for a living.

>> But now, I think they just sell their pride instead of working to earn money since disabled people who only have a hand or leg also work for a living if they have a passion for a living.

 Furthermore, I realized it hasn’t been able to encourage them when I have read an article that they prefer to buy alcohol better than buy foods.
>> Furthermore, I realized it is not able to encourage them when I have read an article that they prefer to buy alcohol rather than buy food.
Second, various of organization gather money from the others.

>>Second, various organizations gather money from the others.

And they send only few amounts to the people who needed to get help or just corrupt it.

>>Moreover, they only partake a small amount to the people who needed to get help, or they just exploit them.

Regarding of Africa, money might not be reached to the people who don’t have enough abilities having meals day by day since it will be corrupted by rich people in Africa.

>>Regarding Africa, money might not reach the people who don’t have enough abilities having meals day by day since it will be corrupted by rich people in Africa.

I have watched news about these issues.
>>
I have watched news about this issue.
Therefore, purpose of the charity is good but it not good way only gather money for them.

>>Therefore, the purpose of the charity is good but it not good way only gather money for them.

It should be better to buy the thing that they need and visit them for a help.

>>It should be better to buy the thing that they need and visit them for help.

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