Is competition good for us and why?

2018-08-06 · 첨삭 강사 Grace

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August.6.2018 Please check your homework below (ANSWER THE QUESTIONS INTO 3-4 SENTENCES) >>> Is competition good for us and why? I think competition has advantage and disadvantage. Competition leads to innovation. Nowadays we are experiencing innovation technology such as IPhone, GPS, YouTube, Google, Amazon, Facebook, and so on. Those kind of all things can help lead a better life. the other way we have to make a constant effort for better life or better get good pay, for example if you are office worker and you want to get something, maybe you should spent a lot of time for study, learn, and hard work.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Yeong!^^

Please still practice your vocabulary words, punctuation marks and subject verb agreement.

Please check your corrections below

I think competition has advantage and disadvantage. Competition leads to innovation. Nowadays we are experiencing innovation technology such as IPhone, GPS, YouTube, Google, Amazon, Facebook, and so on. Those kind of all things can help lead a better life.
>> I think competition has advantages and disadvantages. Competition leads to innovation. Now a days we are experiencing innovative technology such as iPhone, GPS, YouTube, Google, Amazon, Facebook, and so on. Those things can help us to live in a better life.

the other way we have to make a constant effort for better life or better get good pay, for example if you are office worker and you want to get something, maybe you should spent a lot of time for study, learn, and hard work.

>> We have to make a constant effort for a better life or to get a good pay, for example, if you are an office worker and you want to get something, maybe you should spend a lot of time to study, learn, and hard work..

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