Is drinking milk healthy for humans?
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Is drinking milk healthy for humans? Do you think drinking milk is healthy for humans?
I think drinking milk is healthy for us. The first reason that i think milk is healthy is because it help you to grow. Milk have lots of calcium, so that milk affect to your bones and it makes you more taller. The second reason is milk have lots of vitamin D. And vitamin D is good for your body. The third reason is the nutrients in dairy foods improve the body\'s ability to burn fat, especially abdominal fat. Some people think that milk can hurt your stomach. But it can just happen when you drink too much milk or drink rotten milk.
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Good afternoon, Ella!^^
Thank you for answering this question. You did a great job sharing your thoughts though writing. I appreciate it very much. I also noticed that you\'re not in my class anymore. I\'m sorry if I offended you in my comments because I just said our class was affected with you moving a lot. Anyway, thank you very much for being my student and it was nice meeting you. Continue practicing your English skills. Take care and see you again soon. ^_^
The first reason that i think milk is healthy is because it help you to grow.
>>>The first reason that I think milk is healthy is because it helps you to grow.
Milk have lots of calcium, so that milk affect to your bones and it makes you more taller.
>>> Milk is rich calcium so it affects your bones which makes you taller.
The second reason is milk have lots of vitamin D. And vitamin D is good for your body.
>>> The second reason is that milk is high in vitamin D which is good for your body.
The third reason is the nutrients in dairy foods improve the body\'s ability to burn fat, especially abdominal fat.
>>>The last reason is that nutrients in dairy products improve the body\'s ability to burn fat, especially abdominal fat.
Some people think that milk can hurt your stomach. But it can just happen when you drink too much milk or drink rotten milk.
>>>Some people think that milk can hurt your stomach, but it can happen when you drink too much or drink spoiled milk.
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