Is eating out a necessity or a luxury in modern life? Explain your opinion.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think It\'s a necessity.
There are a lot of reasons, but I am going to say two things.
The first, eating out gives us convenience. We don\'t need to cook and wash the dishes.
The second, You can make good memories to your-self or loved one.
In my case, I have a good memory that I ate out with my family when I was a kid.
강사 첨삭
You clearly stated your opinion and supported it with two well-organized reasons, which makes your response easy to follow. I especially liked that you included a personal example about eating out with your family, it made your answer more sincere and relatable. Your ideas are strong and logical. To improve further, focus on formal expressions and small grammar details such as transitions and prepositions. Overall, this was a thoughtful and well-structured response. Great job!
-Teacher Wela
I think It\'s a necessity.
>> I think it’s a necessity.
There are a lot of reasons, but I am going to say two things.
>> There are many reasons, but I will mention two.
The first, eating out gives us convenience.
>> First, eating out gives us convenience.
We don\'t need to cook and wash the dishes.
>> We do not need to cook or wash the dishes.
The second, You can make good memories to your-self or loved one.
>> Second, we can make good memories for ourselves or our loved ones.
In my case, I have a good memory that I ate out with my family when I was a kid.
>> In my case, I have a good memory of eating out with my family when I was a child.
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