Is education primarily the result of influences other than school

2016-04-20 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I think that education from school is still very important for children. School is the first community for children before they run into real society. There are many same age friends and will learn how to cooperate, concede and also lots of subjects literally. Children spend their most of time in school and at home. As you could know in this point, I also consider that parents’ education is exceptionally important to their children. Younger their children are, more they learn from their parents in every aspect. Parents can affect their children about sense of values or characteristic or their dream as well. After their graduation from school, they would also learn a lot from society, but it would be after formation of their ego. In a word, there could be various factors that can make one mature, however, I consider that school and parents are the primary.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]a. (^_^) How\'s your day going so far? Thank you for doing your homework. I agree when you said schools and parents have an important role in educating a child. However, not all lessons in life are acquired inside the four walls of a classroom or in the four walls of a home. While it is true that our parent are our first teachers, not all important lessons will be taught by them.  The same is true with our teachers. I honestly think most of life\'s valuable lessons are learned outside school. It\'s because in schools, they teach students not to make mistakes. Mistakes are actually a very good avenue for learning. It\'s because in real life, whether you like it or not, you will make a lot of them. A person should take advantage of all forms of learning, whether it\'s at home, in school or in the society. Anyhow, I hope you learned something today. I\'ll see you later. Take care always and God bless. ^^ ~Teacher Charry (^^,) I think that education from school is still very important for children. >> CORRECT! OR >> In my opinion, the education acquired from school is still very important for children. School is the first community for children before they run into real society. >> CORRECT! OR >> School is the first community for children before they start experiencing the real world. There are many same age friends and will learn how to cooperate, concede and also lots of subjects literally. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: We can meet a lot of friends with the same age as ours in school and we can also learn how to cooperate and concede. In addition to that, we can also learn about different subjects. Children spend their most of time in school and at home. >>Children spend most of their time in school and at home. As you could know in this point, I also consider that parents’ education is exceptionally important to their children. >> As you know at this point, I also consider the form of education parents give their children as equally important. Younger their children are, more they learn from their parents in every aspect. >> [DO YOU MEAN]: Younger children learn more from their parents in every aspect. Parents can affect their children about sense of values or characteristic or their dream as well. >> Parents can affect their children\'s sense of values, characteristics and dreams. After their graduation from school, they would also learn a lot from society, but it would be after formation of their ego. >> After their graduation from school, they would also learn a lot from society, but it would be after the formation of their ego. In a word, there could be various factors that can make one mature, however, I consider that school and parents are the primary >> In summary, there could be various factors that can make one mature, however, I consider the school and parents as the primary factors that affect a person\'s maturity.

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