Is falling birth rate a problem?
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Yes, it is a very serious social problem and this is a thing we have to solve out. I think there are a few reasons why parents don’t want to have babies.
First one is a economical burden of raising kids with a huge amount of money for their house. Kids normally start go to join in extracurriculars when they are four years old and parents push them to find their interest. Of coarse, kids go to several places.
Second thing is that most parents want their kids go to good school and get a good job. They believe good school and job might give the happy life to them regardless of their kid’s real thought.
Parents might want to satisfy their life through how they grow.
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Yes, it is a very serious social problem and this is a thing we have to solve out.
>> Correct!
I think there are a few reasons why parents don’t want to have babies.
>> Correct!
First one is a economical burden of raising kids with a huge amount of money for their house.
>> First one is the economical burden of raising kids and a big amount of money for their house.
Kids normally start go to join in extracurriculars when they are four years old and parents push them to find their interest.
>> Kids normally start joining in extracurricular activities when reach four years old and parents push them to find their interest.
Of coarse, kids go to several places.
>> Of course, kids go to several places.
Second thing is that most parents want their kids go to good school and get a good job.
>> Second thing is that most parents want their kids to go to a good school and get a good job.
They believe good school and job might give the happy life to them regardless of their kid’s real thought.
>> They believe a good school and a job might give their children a happy life regardless of their kid\'s real thought about it.
Parents might want to satisfy their life through how they grow.
>> Parents might want to satisfy their life by how their kids grow.
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