Is falling birth rate a problem in your country too? How do countries fight falling birth rates?

2020-01-21 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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My country is considering as serious problem about birth rate. Last year, birth rate of Korea is 0.98 and it is only country which birth rate is less than 1. So, the government and local government is trying to effort to increase the birth rate during last 10 years. But, it is not effective looking last birth rate. Other countries is continuing high birth rate through many efforts. For example, France government supports educational expenses by university. Also, Sweden government guarantees 80% of salary for 390 days although parents are on parental leave. Additionally, they are supporting people through various institution. I think it is very important to equip proper environment like parental leave. However, It is more effective to pay a children-birth grant which it is about 25000 dollars per one child in Korea. Because my country is urgent circumstance as we need a prompt effect. Thus, we should give strong impact to parents.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Se [이름]!

~Teacher Lucy


My country is considering as serious problem about birth rate.

>>My country is considering birth rate as serious problem.

 Last year, birth rate of Korea is 0.98 and it is only country which birth rate is less than 1.

>>CORRECT!

So, the government and local government is trying to effort to increase the birth rate during last 10 years.

>>So, the government and local government is trying their effort to increase the birth rate during last 10 years.

But, it is not effective looking last birth rate.
>>But, it is not effective looking at the last birth rate.
Other countries is continuing high birth rate through many efforts.

>>CORRECT!

For example, France government supports educational expenses by university.

>>For example, France government supports educational expenses by universities.

 Also, Sweden government guarantees 80% of salary for 390 days although parents are on parental leave.

>>CORRECT!

Additionally, they are supporting people through various institution.

>>CORRECT!
 I think it is very important to equip proper environment like parental leave.

>>CORRECT!

 However, It is more effective to pay a children-birth grant which it is about 25000 dollars per one child in Korea.

>>CORRECT!

 Because my country is urgent circumstance as we need a prompt effect.

>>Because my country is in urgent circumstance as we need a prompt effect.

 Thus, we should give strong impact to parents.

>>CORRECT!

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