Is fashion important or not important? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, fashion is important because it allows people to express their personalities. What a person chooses to wear tells a great deal about what kinds of values he or she carries as well as what kinds of personality the person has. Sometimes fashion is the only way a person can be confident and happy. Moreover, Fashion can also be a part of people\'s culture.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]! ^^.
I totally agree with you!
Thank you for this.
- T. Rina
1. In my opinion, fashion is important because it allows people to express their personalities.
>> CORRECT!
2. What a person chooses to wear tells a great deal about what kinds of values he or she carries as well as what kinds of personality the person has.
>> CORRECT!
3. Sometimes fashion is the only way a person can be confident and happy.
>> CORRECT!
4. Moreover, Fashion can also be a part of people\'s culture
>> CORRECT!
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