Is fashion important or not important? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Of course The fashion is important!! Because I love clothe and interest in fashion.
So It is important to me. For example, When I look at the man seemingly I see his fashion style at first. Naturally I love the nice face, body and mind:)
And I spend a lot of the money on clothes and shoses But ironically I don't have the clothe to wear. I'm very sad....
강사 첨삭
Good morning [이름]!
Thanks for sharing this to me.
I am knowing more of your interest. ^_^
Please go over your sentences and the corrections I noted.
Enjoy this day!
~T. Jessie~
Of course The fashion is important!!
>> Of course, fashion is important!!
Because I love clothe and interest in fashion.
>> Because I love clothes and I am interested in fashion.
So It is important to me.
>> So it is important to me.
For example, When I look at the man seemingly I see his fashion style at first.
>> For example, when I seemingly look at a man, I look at his fashion style first.
Naturally I love the nice face, body and mind:)
>> Correct!
And I spend a lot of the money on clothes and shoses But ironically I don\'t have the clothe to wear.
>> And I spend a lot of the money on clothes and shoes but ironically I don\'t have the clothes to wear.
I\'m very sad....
>> Correct!
Thanks for sharing this to me.
I am knowing more of your interest. ^_^
Please go over your sentences and the corrections I noted.
Enjoy this day!
~T. Jessie~
Of course The fashion is important!!
>> Of course, fashion is important!!
Because I love clothe and interest in fashion.
>> Because I love clothes and I am interested in fashion.
So It is important to me.
>> So it is important to me.
For example, When I look at the man seemingly I see his fashion style at first.
>> For example, when I seemingly look at a man, I look at his fashion style first.
Naturally I love the nice face, body and mind:)
>> Correct!
And I spend a lot of the money on clothes and shoses But ironically I don\'t have the clothe to wear.
>> And I spend a lot of the money on clothes and shoes but ironically I don\'t have the clothes to wear.
I\'m very sad....
>> Correct!
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