Is first impression important?

2020-04-07 · 첨삭 강사 Rina

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I didn\'t like that the elderly predicated about someone they met within 10 minutes quickly. They told me they knew someone\'s personality and characteristics through someone\'s face, gestures, and clothes. I didn\'t agree with that. I thought the elderly were stubborn and had their strong assertions. After turning the thirties, toward the forties, I have changed my mind. I have met many people and experienced many things. And I have gotten hurt from many people. Meanwhile, I made my databases and sort of prejudices that I have to avoid someone and I am likely to get along with someone. I became the same person as I judged someone without much time. It is natural to have our own databases about people. But you have to know our databases are not perfect and you can be changeable depending on situations. Because most people judge you as the first impression, we have to pay attention to our appearance like speech, gesture, and cloths. I don\'t mean you will show off your appearance. :)

강사 첨삭

Good day. [이름]! ^^
I hope you feel good today~

- T. Rina


1. I didn\'t like that the elderly predicated about someone they met within 10 minutes quickly. 
>> I didn\'t like that the elderly judged someone they just met for 10 minutes.

2. They told me they knew someone\'s personality and characteristics through someone\'s face, gestures, and clothes. 
>> CORRECT!

3. I didn\'t agree with that. I thought the elderly were stubborn and had their strong assertions. 
>> CORRECT!

4. After turning the thirties, toward the forties, I have changed my mind. 
>> After turning thirty, and now almost forty, I have changed my mind.
OR: In my thirties, now towards forties, I have changed my mind.

5. I have met many people and experienced many things. 
>> CORRECT!

6. And I have gotten hurt from many people. 
>> CORRECT!
OR: I was hurt by many people.

7. Meanwhile, I made my databases and sort of prejudices that I have to avoid someone and I am likely to get along with someone.\'
>> Meanwhile, I have stereotypes and sort of prejudices that I have to avoid someone and I am likely to get along with someone.

8. I became the same person as I judged someone without much time. 
>> CORRECT!

9. It is natural to have our own databases about people. 
>> It is natural to have our own stereotypes about people.

10. But you have to know our databases are not perfect and you can be changeable depending on situations. 
>> But you have to know that all our judgments are not perfect and it can be changed depending on situations.

11. Because most people judge you as the first impression, we have to pay attention to our appearance like speech, gesture, and cloths. 
>> CORRECT! (cloths->clothes)

12. I don\'t mean you will show off your appearance. 
>> CORRECT!

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