Is gun control an effective way to control crime? Explain your answer.
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I haven\'t thought of using guns because people can\'t purchase guns in our country. Only persons who are allowed to use it can buy it such as shooting players. I haven\'t thought that gun control isn\'t an effective way because of same reason above. I guess that most Korean think like me, because use of gun restrict strictly by the law and we believe that if persons have a gun, they might misuse it when they are in danger or lost their mind. However, I have seen an article about gun possession in USA, many people support the advantages of gun possession and they believe that if they have guns at home, they would be safe from the crime. So they think that the crime rate will be lower than when they don\'t have a gun. But I have watched a lot of events which misused a gun in the USA. Even school, there were shooting accidents to the students. In conclusion, I believe that gun control an effective way to control crime.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I haven\'t thought of using guns because people can\'t purchase guns in our country.
>>> CORRECT
Only persons who are allowed to use it can buy it such as shooting players.
>>> Only people who are allowed to use it can buy it such as shooting players.
I haven\'t thought that gun control is an effective way because of the same reasons mentioned above.
>>> CORRECT
I guess that most Korean think like me, because use of gun restrict strictly by the law and we believe that if persons have a gun, they might misuse it when they are in danger or lost their mind.
>>> I guess that most Koreans think like me, because the use of gun is strictly restricted by the law and we believe that if a person owns a gun, they might misuse it when they are in danger or lost their mind.
However, I have seen an article about gun possession in the USA, many people support the advantages of gun possession and they believe that if they have guns at home, they would be safe from the crime.
>>> CORRECT
So they think that the crime rate will be lower than when they don\'t have a gun.
>>> CORRECT
But I have watched a lot of events which misused a gun in the USA.
>>> CORRECT
Even school, there were shooting accidents to the students.
>>> Even schools, have shooting accidents to students.
In conclusion, I believe that gun control is an effective way to control crime.
>>> CORRECT
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