Is having an army a waste of money in your country?
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Having an army is a waste of money for the reasons. First, korea imports the latest weapon from the other countries. The budget is consist of tax. If we had peaceful conditions, Expanding spenditure policy for the people will come into force. And, Thesedays the wage of soldiers is increasing gradually.
However, Raising spenditure for protecting country puts up with it by the location and specific situations. For example, The china\'s and Russia\'s air force are infringing on our air to practice their stretegies. At that time, korea soldiers shooted some misiles to react on it.
And few north kroeans have reached here by using a ferry that made of wooden only few days ago. Many people were worried about some situation which some north korea soldiers had reached here with weapon to attact south korea.
I think to maintain level of influential countries in a world wide, It isessential to have army.
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Having an army is a waste of money for the reasons.
>>Having an army is a waste of money for the following reasons:
First, korea imports the latest weapon from the other countries.
>>>> First, Korea imports the latest weapon from other countries.
The budget is consist of tax.
>>>> The government takes the budget from the people\'s taxes.
If we had peaceful conditions, Expanding spenditure policy for the people will come into force. And, Thesedays the wage of soldiers is increasing gradually.
>>>> If we were at peace, expanding the expenditure policy for the people will come into force. In addition, the wage of soldiers these days is increasing gradually.
However, Raising spenditure for protecting country puts up with it by the location and specific situations.
>>>> However, raising the expenditure to protect the country depends on the location and specific situations.
For example, The china\'s and Russia\'s air force are infringing on our air to practice their stretegies.
>>>> For example, China\'s and Russia\'s air force are infringing our airspace to practice their strategies.
At that time, korea soldiers shooted some misiles to react on it.
>>>> At that time, Korean soldiers shot some missiles in reaction.
And few north kroeans have reached here by using a ferry that made of wooden only few days ago.
>>>> Furthermore, few North Korean defectors entered our country.
Many people were worried about some situation which some north korea soldiers had reached here with weapon to attact south korea.
>>>> Many people were worried that some North Korean soldiers would come and attack the South.
I think to maintain level of influential countries in a world wide, It isessential to have army.
>>>> I think that to maintain a level of influence in the world, it is essential to have an army.
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