Is it a good idea to have a career in the military?
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Absolutely not. If someone asks me \"Do you think the military is a good experience in your life?\" I\'m going to answer \"Never, I really regret my time in the army\" I explain the reason why I think about it. First, most of people in South Korea tend to think that they can give solider too much work. Simply, it\'s a slave. Also, even most of men served in the military in early 20s, they couldn\'t receive any benefits.
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Good day, Eric!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
Absolutely not.
>> CORRECT!If someone asks me \"Do you think the military is a good experience in your life?\"
>> CORRECT!I\'m going to answer \"Never, I really regret my time in the army\".
>> CORRECT!I explain the reason why I think about it.
>> CORRECT!First, most of people in South Korea tend to think that they can give solider too much work.
>> First, most people in South Korea tend to think that they can give soldiers too much work.
OR >> First, most people in South Korea tend to think that they can give soldiers heavy loads of work.
Simply, it\'s a slave.
>> Simply, it\'s slavery.
Also, even most of men served in the military in early 20s, they couldn\'t receive any benefits.
>> Also, even most men who served in the military in early 20s, they couldn\'t receive any benefits.
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