Is it a good reason to have children to avoid being lonely later in life? If raising children were f
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I don’t deny that I wanted to have many children to make me much happier. However, having children is not only for me but also for them. People need protection and care until they are grown up enough to stand on their feet. The better support for them, the better for them. When it comes to raising children, just money is not the key to all problems. Children need more than that. they need enough love and caring, which is the reason why the number of children I have should be limited. If raising children were free with unprecedented government support, I couldn’t have more than four children because I want to give them respectively as much love as I can.
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Hello, Steve! ^^
Thank you for the composition.
See you in our next class! :)
~ Teacher Tricia
I don’t deny that I wanted to have many children to make me much happier.
>>> CORRECT!
However, having children is not only for me but also for them. People need protection and care until they are grown up enough to stand on their feet.
>>> CORRECT!
The better support for them, the better for them. When it comes to raising children, just money is not the key to all problems.
>>> CORRECT!
Children need more than that. they need enough love and caring, which is the reason why the number of children I have should be limited.
>>> CORRECT!
If raising children were free with unprecedented government support, I couldn’t have more than four children because I want to give them respectively as much love as I can.
>>> CORRECT!
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