Is it always necessary for a married couple to have kids?
학생이 쓴 원문
Having kids isn\'t always necessary for a married couple. In my case, I wanted to have kids after getting married. Fortunately, I have two children. After having children, I have faced lots of troubles until now. One day, I had thought about having a child for a long time. My conclusion is that, raising children is very difficult. It needs lots of effort and money. If I don\'t have children, I can spend all of my money and rest time for me. I don\'t need to worry about my children\'s life. But, if I don\'t have a child, my life patterns will be the same every day. I will be sick of tired, because of my life patterns. Maybe it is possible to lose my life\'s goal. Now, I have two children, I don\'t have enough time to worry about my life\'s goal.
강사 첨삭
Good evening [이름]ny! :)
Thank you for writing this impressive essay. You made a lot of nice sentences. Good job!
I agree that it\'s not necessary to have kids when you\'re married. But I also agree that having kids gives you a bigger purpose in life.
See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry
Thank you for writing this impressive essay. You made a lot of nice sentences. Good job!
I agree that it\'s not necessary to have kids when you\'re married. But I also agree that having kids gives you a bigger purpose in life.
See you in class later. ^^
~Teacher Charry
>> CORRECT!
In my case, I wanted to have kids after getting married.
>> CORRECT!
Fortunately, I have two children.
>> Fortunately, I have had two children.
After having children, I have faced lots of troubles until now.
>> From the moment I had children, I have been facing lots of troubles.
One day, I had thought about having a child for a long time.
>> One day, I thought about having a child after a long time.
My conclusion is that, raising children is very difficult.
>> My conclusion was that, raising children is very difficult.
It needs lots of effort and money.
>> CORRECT!
If I don\'t have children, I can spend all of my money and rest time for me.
>> If I don\'t have children, I can spend all of my money and rest time on my self.
I don\'t need to worry about my children\'s life.
>> I don\'t need to worry about my children\'s lives.
But, if I don\'t have a child, my life patterns will be the same every day.
>> CORRECT!
I will be sick of tired, because of my life patterns.
>> I will be sick and tired of the same life patterns.
>> I will be sick and tired of the same life patterns.
Maybe it is possible to lose my life\'s goal.
>> CORRECT!
Now, I have two children, I don\'t have enough time to worry about my life\'s goal.
>> Now, I have two children and I don\'t have enough time to worry about my life\'s goal.
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