Is it always necessary to complain? Have you ever gotten angry at a worker in a store or a restauran

2014-03-26 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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Although it is not always necessary for us to complain, there are cases that we need to make a complaint to ensure their quality of goods and services to be improved. And some business owners or workers do not take it seriously unless we raise our voice. Or they might not aware of the problems if we keep silent. There is a saying that the squeaky wheel gets the oil. However, when making a complaint, we should respect others not to unnecessary offend them because they might have done it undeliberately. We, as an adult, are mature enough to control our emotion. We should always calm down and resolve prolblems with others in a good manner. There are people who always complain even for a trivial thing and blow off steam to workers. They do it habitually because they believe it is the most powerful and effective way to get their demand to be accepted. In a modern society, we are stressed out and often lose our temper. However, we should not attempt to vitimize others for my selfinterest.

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Although it is not always necessary for us to complain, there are cases that we need to make a complaint to ensure their quality of goods and services to be improved.

>> Correct!

>> OR: Although it is not always necessary for us to complain, there are some instances that we need to make a complaint to ensure their quality of goods and services to be improved.

And some business owners or workers do not take it seriously unless we raise our voice.

>> Correct!

Or they might not aware of the problems if we keep silent.

>> They are not fully aware of the problems if we keep silent.

>> OR: They will not be aware of the problems if we keep silent.

There is a saying that the squeaky wheel gets the oil.

>> Correct!

However, when making a complaint, we should respect others not to unnecessary offend them because they might have done it undeliberately.

>> However, when making a complaint, we should respect others in order for us not to offend them because they might have done it undeliberately.

We, as an adult, are mature enough to control our emotion.

>> Correct!

We should always calm down and resolve prolblems with others in a good manner.

>> Correct!

>> OR: We should always calm down and resolve the problems with others in a good manner.

There are people who always complain even for a trivial thing and blow off steam to workers.

>> Correct!

They do it habitually because they believe it is the most powerful and effective way to get their demand to be accepted.

>> Correct!

In a modern society, we are stressed out and often lose our temper.

>> In modern society, we are stressed out and often lose our temper.

However, we should not attempt to vitimize others for my selfinterest.

>> However, we should not attempt to victimize others for self interest.

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