Is it best for people to accept who they are and what they have, or should people always strive to b
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Hi, [이름]a! (^_^)
A beautiful Thursday to you.
I can\'t believe it\'s Thursday. Time flies!
Thank you very much for doing your homework.
I loved reading about your thoughts and opinions.
I also loved the examples you\'ve used.
I absolutely agree with the saying: “too much is as bad as too little.”
The lack of ambition is as much the same as staying in your comfort zone.
When a person gets imprisoned in his own comfort zone, he stops growing and eventually dies; at least in a figurative m[이름]er.
Only corpses stop growing.
On the other hand, when a person gets too ambitious, his greed, ego and selfishness also grow.
Some people don\'t know when to stop and they eventually get trapped in an abyss that they have created.
They don\'t get satisfied so they seek for more.
It\'s not wrong to have ambitions but like what you\'ve said in the beginning of your answer, too much is as bad as too little.
The key here is knowing when to stop.
I hope you are having a great day.
I\'ll see you again tomorrow.
~Teacher Charry (^_^)
First of all, I like the saying “too much is as bad as too little.”
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Before anything else, I would like to state that I like the saying “too much is as bad as too little.”
Simply, I can find the example of this saying when I see entertainers on TV sometimes.
>> I can simply find an example for this saying when I see entertainers on TV sometimes.
One entertainer was very pretty but she wasn’t satisfied with her appearance and kept doing plastic surgery.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> One entertainer was very pretty but she wasn’t satisfied with her appearance and kept having/undergoing plastic surgery.
After all, people couldn’t recognize who she was.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: After all of the surgeries she\'s gone through, people couldn’t recognize who she was.
Adding one more examples, when we play the stock market, someone keep waiting till their money reach to the top of the top.
>> Another example would be when we play the stock market. Some people keep waiting until their money reach the peak of the market.
However, not like what they expected, it could be decrease, and they would keep waiting again to offset what they lost.
>> However, not like what they expected, the value of their stocks could decrease, but they would still keep waiting just to offset what they lost.
And it ends up with losing a lot.
>> And they end up losing a lot.
As you can see in those cases, too much ambition and greed can spoil everything
>> As you can see in those cases, too much ambition and greed can spoil everything.
However, reversely, too much self-acceptance can turn into too much self-satisfied or too much pessimism also can turn in to desperation.
>> However, reversely, too much self-acceptance can turn into too much self-satisfaction and too much pessimism can also turn into desperation.
Like this, I consider that the most important thing is to know their own self and to strive to their best.
>> Like this, I consider that the most important thing is to know their own self and to strive to do their best.
Not forgetting reviewing one’s mind time to time would be good for us.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: Not forgetting to reflect from time to time would be good for us.
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