Is it better to go on vacation in summer or winter? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
People usually go on vacation in summer and winter because it\'s too hot or cold to work. Or because their children\'s vacation is in summer and winter. I partially agree with that.
However, if we plan traveling on vacation, summer and winter isn\'t the best option in Korea. As mentioned before, summer is too hot to active outside and winter is too cold in Korea. So, if we want to tour outside, we might choose going another nation. Therefore, I think we go on vacation in spring and fall rather than summer and winter.
강사 첨삭
Hi! I read your paragraph about going on vacation, and you have some good ideas. I like that you explained why people usually travel in summer and winter and gave your own opinion about spring and fall. Your reasoning is clear, but there are some grammar and word choices that need a little correction. Keep up the good work!
-Teacher Wela
People usually go on vacation in summer and winter because it\'s too hot or cold to work. Or because their children\'s vacation is in summer and winter. I partially agree with that.
>> People usually go on vacation in summer or winter because it is too hot or too cold to work, or because their children have school vacations during these seasons. I partially agree with this.
>> People usually go on vacation in summer or winter because it is too hot or too cold to work, or because their children have school vacations during these seasons. I partially agree with this.
However, if we plan traveling on vacation, summer and winter isn\'t the best option in Korea.
>> However, if we plan to travel for vacation, summer and winter are not the best options in Korea.
As mentioned before, summer is too hot to active outside and winter is too cold in Korea.
>> As mentioned before, summer is too hot to be active outdoors, and winter is very cold in Korea.
So, if we want to tour outside, we might choose going another nation.
>> So, if we want to travel outdoors, we might choose to visit another country.
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