Is it better to play sport competitively or just for fun?

2024-01-12 · 첨삭 강사 Kristine

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I think, it will be better to play games just for fun as ordinary people but we see everywhere that there is always the people who are very competitive. Competition sometimes makes the games more fun and interesting but too much competition could ruin the bright atmosphere. So I think, the entertainment must be the center of the gathering and just a little competition would be enough.

강사 첨삭

Hey, Ki!

Happy Friday! I hope you\'re having a good day. Thanks for doing your homework! 

- Kristine ^^ 

I think, it will be better to play games just for fun as ordinary people but we see everywhere that there is always the people who are very competitive. 
>> I think it will be better to play games just for fun as ordinary people, but we see everywhere that there are always people who are very competitive.
Competition sometimes makes the games more fun and interesting but too much competition could ruin the bright atmosphere. 
>> Competition sometimes makes the games more fun and interesting, but too much competition could ruin the bright atmosphere.
So I think, the entertainment must be the center of the gathering and just a little competition would be enough.
>> So I think the entertainment must be at the center of the gathering, and just a little competition would be enough.

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