Is it better to spend a vacation relaxing or exploring new places?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it depends on what days we spent and personal preference. First, if we spend our weekday with lots of people and outside works, we might want to relax on vacation. For relaxing and recharging, we can stay at home, take a massage, or go to peaceful place and just lying on the grass. But if we work at desk all day long, we might want to go out and meet people to charge energy. And the exploring new place is most interesting things for engaging people\'s exhausted mind.
However, there exist an exception. The person\'s propensity affect to plan what they do on vacation. If someone has an introverted disposition, he want to stay at home all of his vacation. And the opposite is true as well.
강사 첨삭
Good Day, Mary! You gave a very balanced and thoughtful answer. I like how you considered both work style and personality when explaining vacation preferences, because that shows mature and flexible thinking. Your examples made your ideas easy to understand, especially the contrast between people who work outdoors and those who work at a desk. You also did a great job acknowledging exceptions and individual differences, which strengthens your argument. Overall, this was a clear, logical, and well-developed response, keep expressing your ideas this way!
-Teacher Wela
I think it depends on what days we spent and personal preference.
>> I think it depends on how we spend our weekdays and on personal preference.
First, if we spend our weekday with lots of people and outside works, we might want to relax on vacation.
>> First, if we spend our weekdays interacting with many people and doing outdoor work, we might want to relax during our vacation.
For relaxing and recharging, we can stay at home, take a massage, or go to peaceful place and just lying on the grass.
>> To relax and recharge, we can stay at home, get a massage, or go to a peaceful place and lie on the grass.
But if we work at desk all day long, we might want to go out and meet people to charge energy.
>> However, if we work at a desk all day long, we might want to go out, meet people, and regain energy.
And the exploring new place is most interesting things for engaging people\'s exhausted mind.
>> Exploring new places can be one of the most effective ways to refresh an exhausted mind.
However, there exist an exception.
>> However, there are exceptions.
The person\'s propensity affect to plan what they do on vacation.
>> A person’s personality also affects how they plan their vacation.
If someone has an introverted disposition, he want to stay at home all of his vacation.
>> If someone has an introverted disposition, they may want to stay at home for their entire vacation.
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