Is it better to work after a bachelor’s degree instead of studying further? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, i think it it better to work after a bachelor\'s degree instead of studying further.
Because real experience and careers in some area is becoming more important than just knowledge which we can gain on desk.
Moreover, i believe real ability for some area can be gained through direct experience.
People get to learn something important through doing those thing in person and facing.
They could learn something difficult and unexpected by dealing with and handling them.
Theory is just text, more important thing is their real performance in real situation.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Serena!
You shared your opinion clearly and supported it with several good reasons. I like how you emphasized the value of real-life experience and connected your ideas from beginning to end.
Your examples make your opinion easy to understand, and your message is convincing.
Keep sharing your thoughts like this!
~Teacher Polly
>>Yes, I think it is better to work after a bachelor\'s degree instead of studying further.
Because real experience and careers in some area is becoming more important than just knowledge which we can gain on desk.
>>Because real experience and a career in a specific field are becoming more important than the knowledge we gain in the classroom.
Moreover, i believe real ability for some area can be gained through direct experience.
>>Moreover, I believe real skills can be developed through direct experience.
People get to learn something important through doing those thing in person and facing.
>>People learn important things by doing them in person and facing real situations.
They could learn something difficult and unexpected by dealing with and handling them.
>>They can learn to deal with difficult and unexpected situations through hands-on experience.
Theory is just text, more important thing is their real performance in real situation.
>>Theory is just knowledge on paper, but what is more important is how people perform in real situations.
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