Is it better to work for someone than to work for yourself?
학생이 쓴 원문
I am not sure this subject\'s my answer. When I was working I thank that l was working for myself and my family. But my working can impacked to other people. When l was chooseing, I thank that which one is the better for more people,which one is more better our society. So I think that it seems like we were working myself but we were working for family society and world. So we can working pleasantly.
강사 첨삭
Hello Eva!!!
I encourage you to to assess yourself and set up your goals, these goals are ownership or your learnings. So start setting up your goals if life and especially in setting up your goals in learning English these are your treasures. I can see you your potentials in speaking keep it up.!!!!
T. Jeny
>>I am not sure if my answer is related to my answer.
When I was working I thank that l was working for myself and my family.
When I was working I thank that l was working for myself and my family.
>>When I was working, I was thankful because I working for myself and my family.
But my working can impacked to other people.
But my working can impacked to other people.
>>But my work didn\'t affect other people.
When l was chooseing, I thank that which one is the better for more people,which one is more better our society.
When l was chooseing, I thank that which one is the better for more people,which one is more better our society.
>>Whenever I choose, I always think if it would be good for the people and the society as well.
So I think that it seems like we were working myself but we were working for family society and world.
>>So I think I was working for myself, for the people, for the society and for the world.
So we can working pleasantly.
So we can working pleasantly.
>>correct
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